Grr Bar ShUd
Grr酒吧Shud
没有第五个字形就乱涂乱画了？简单
事实上，我会做两件事来表明我的同谋
滚动我的节将显示一个勇气
因为我必须承认我的措辞有点不妥
但我绝不会以任何理由担心你
只要坐下来一边享受，一边听起来很机智
然后沉入椅子中听我的语法
用垫和蜡笔来钉住这个班级
下沉，想一想
我现在告诉你，现在你不应该放弃
因为我控制我的流量，好像它被困在流沙中
快速，缓慢，掌握着我的手
当你在没有第五个字形的情况下涂写作品时
你的话不希望突然变得僵硬
只需仔细研究备份
你会发现你不会滑倒
I'd just like to point out that if you translate the Chinese version back into English it's pretty funny and makes no sense but here is the original:
Grr Bar ShUd
To scrawl without a fifth glyph? Simplicity
In fact, I’ll do it two-fold to show my complicity
To scroll through my stanzas will show a grit
For I must admit my wording is a bit misfit
But I won’t worry you with nitty-gritty
Just sit back and savor as I sound witty
And sink in your chair to sounds of my syntax
With a pad and crayon to nail down this class
Sink low, think hard
What I am showing you now you should not discard
For I control my flow as if it was stuck in quicksand
Fast, slow, with command in my hand
As you scrawl a work without a fifth glyph
Your words do not wish to abruptly turn stiff
Simply mull for a backup
And you’ll find you won’t slip up
Writing a poem without the letter "e" proved pretty challenging for me. Often, when I think of what I want to write, I have choice wording. However, the annoying condition of not being able to write "e" didn't let me implement my preferred wording. Therefore, I had a hard time getting my poem to flow like I wanted; I often needed to find weird alternate wording to convey my idea, but that wording didn't flow nicely. In the end, it took a lot of time, but I managed to find good alternative wording for my writing, that allowed it to flow well, and follow the requirement of not being able to write the letter "e". Looking back, the challenge proved to be hard, but enjoyable too.
-Lawrence
I thought it was clever to use a different language without an alphabetic script to write your poem, and the English version is pretty humorous. I like the phrase "scrawl without a fifth glyph" and how fluid the poem sounds without the letter E. Even though I'm not entirely fluent, I can say that this will definitely pass as native Chinese anywhere you go, especially the intelligent title, "Grr酒吧Shud". Great work!
ReplyDeleteThis is super cool, Lawrence. I also think it's super clever to use a different script, but I wonder what the most common phonemes/characters are in Chinese? It might be productive to try to write a poem without those ones. This is not meant as a diss by the way, it's really good.
ReplyDeleteLarry, this was very fun. I thought that you wrote the poem in English, then translated it into Chinese, which is technically still within the parameters of the prompt as Chinese doesn't use "e" either. But you didn't! (Not that it's surprising, but rather you did the more than what was called for.) I was pleasantly surprised with both your poem and your methods of presentation. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis is a very creative way to get around using the letter e! Using the characters of a language that doesn't use a phonetic alphabet was very clever. I also like how the poem in English still doesn't include the letter 'e'.
ReplyDeleteThis was a very clever way of getting around using the letter e! I also enjoyed reading the english translation that also didn't use the letter e. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis is a really cool poem with very clever rhymes. I'm impressed that you actually wrote a whole poem in English instead of just finding the loophole and translating some 'e'-rampant stanzas into Chinese. Nice!
ReplyDeleteCreative! Why did you choose Mandarin? But the content itself is very interesting and clever, the poem actually makes sense and is very funny. The translation is a good level of extra, it made your whole post more intriguing!
ReplyDeleteI love "To scrawl without a fifth glyph? Simplicity" as an opening line. Nice job on both the poem and the commentary. (The commentary zoundz pretty natural, given your limitationz ;)
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